Will iconic images recorded in the grooves of an ancient vase unite the Holy Land or rip it further apart?

THE VASE

A novel by Mark M. DeRobertis

Muhsin Muhabi is a Palestinian potter, descended from a long line of potters. His business is run from the same shop owned by his ancestors since the day his forebears moved to Nazareth. The region's conflict saw the death of his oldest son, and rogue terrorists are in the process of recruiting his youngest in their plot to assassinate the Pope and Israeli prime minister.

Professor Hiram Weiss is an art historian at Nazareth’s Bethel University. He is also a Shin Bet operative on special assignment. With the help of fellow agent, Captain Benny Mathias, he plans to destroy the gang responsible for the death of his wife and only child. He puts a bomb in the ancient vase he takes on loan from Muhsin’s Pottery Shop.

Mary Levin, the charming assistant to the director of Shin Bet, has lost a husband and most of her extended family to recurring wars and never-ending terrorism. She dedicates her life to the preservation of Israel, but to whom will she dedicate her heart - the brilliant professor from Bethel University - or the gallant captain who now leads Kidon?

Harvey Holmes, the Sherlock of Haunted Houses, is a Hollywood TV host whose reality show just flopped. When a Lebanese restaurant owner requests his ghost-hunting services, he believes the opportunity will resurrect his career. All he has to do is exorcise the ghosts that are haunting the restaurant. It happens to be located right across the street from Muhsin’s Pottery Shop.



Friday, March 28, 2014

Characterization and Events Should Make Sense

I've been revising Killer Eyes, and editing it at the same time, making sure all POVs are correct and making sure all plot holes are filled, and that's where I've hit a snag. I touched on this slightly in a previous post, but when a writer writes a story, everything should make sense. Sure, I've seen or read many stories where the writing was lazy, and some of the things in a story did not make sense. That's not a reason to let it happen in one of my stories, however.

No, I want everything to make sense, and when someone does something, especially something major, something that takes a lot of effort and has major consequences or ramifications, then he better have a good reason for doing it. And those reasons better not be in conflict with other things he's doing at the same time. And that's where I am with Killer Eyes. I've been correcting all POV issues, doing some necessary editing, and found that I had a problem with one of the subplots.

It doesn't have to do with Trent Smith, the main character, whose quest for justice in book one, Killer of Killers, is continuing in Killer Eyes. Trent Smith is straightforward, and his beliefs and principles are never in doubt. And they always make sense. No, it has to do with a supporting character, one who is acting behind the scenes, and I can't give any more details without giving away spoilers. And since the book's not out yet, I don't want to do that.

Suffice it to say, that after the great success in the completion of Killer of Killers, and it's even more successful second edition, I want the sequel to KOK to be just as successful in terms of the story line, characterizations, and subplots that take place. I don't want anyone to say, "Well, if this guy is doing this, then why does he end up doing that? It doesn't make sense."

Since I've been revising/editing Killer Eyes, that's just what I found myself saying. And right now, I'm calling it a snag, meaning it's holding me up, preventing completion, and it has to be fixed. Either by giving that supporting character another life changing event to make it happen the way I have it happening, or changing the character to another character who is doing the particular deed in question. Sorry to sound so ambiguous. But I can't give away any spoilers. At least not yet.

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