Found a couple snags last night during what I thought would be a final pass through The Vase. The first was another paragraph that needed a facelift. Even more than the one I wrote about yesterday. The second was a spot of dialogue inserted to make the feelings of my mc more clear. Before I left it to the reader to understand the sentiments of the mc, but I thought it might be too much of a stretch. So without overdoing it, just a few lines of dialogue between the mc and his wife, to make the situation more realisic. Who knows. When I reread it tonight, I might delete it. We'll see how it sounds after it sits for a day.
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